Could you help me to check this short essay, especially the tenses, if you have time? Many thanks! Today I saw different aspects of Medusa through her image evolving from times. Nowadays, Medusa is usually described as a snake-haired, charming monster who (2024)

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The first sentence could be worded slightly better, try "Today I saw different aspects of Medusa's image evolving through time."

Second sentence: "who can turn [a] man into stone with a gaze."

The third sentence is good but it could be better with "in order to get his throne back from his uncle."

Second paragraph: "her and her sisters with scaled heads" should be "her and her sisters as having scaled heads". You need to include an "as" after saying someone described something.

Third paragraph: "This makes the goddess angry and [she] turns her into a monster with scary hair."

Fourth paragraph: "In the middle ages, she was a sign of protection, but in the Renaissance, she was seen as an evil creature. A victim became a terrifying and predatory being."

For the fifth paragraph, try switching the wording around. Maybe try something like "In his poem, 19th-century poet Percy Shelly says that Medusa has a mesmerizing gaze."

Last paragraph: "after a long time of evolvement" sounds strange. Try "After evolving for a long time,". Also, it should say "The previous contents can also explain why the story [of] Medusa we [hear] nowadays has [many] versions. [There are multiple versions] because [the story] comes from many sources."

Good job!

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• Английский (американский вариант)

The first sentence could be worded slightly better, try "Today I saw different aspects of Medusa's image evolving through time."

Second sentence: "who can turn [a] man into stone with a gaze."

The third sentence is good but it could be better with "in order to get his throne back from his uncle."

Second paragraph: "her and her sisters with scaled heads" should be "her and her sisters as having scaled heads". You need to include an "as" after saying someone described something.

Third paragraph: "This makes the goddess angry and [she] turns her into a monster with scary hair."

Fourth paragraph: "In the middle ages, she was a sign of protection, but in the Renaissance, she was seen as an evil creature. A victim became a terrifying and predatory being."

For the fifth paragraph, try switching the wording around. Maybe try something like "In his poem, 19th-century poet Percy Shelly says that Medusa has a mesmerizing gaze."

Last paragraph: "after a long time of evolvement" sounds strange. Try "After evolving for a long time,". Also, it should say "The previous contents can also explain why the story [of] Medusa we [hear] nowadays has [many] versions. [There are multiple versions] because [the story] comes from many sources."

Good job!

@jrratx Thanks for your detailed and clear answer. This is really helpful!